https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ym3S7AhjJBU&t=27s
I am a firm believer
that all feedback is good feedback. People who watched my video liked my
professional dress, that I included my target audience, and explained the
difficulties of quitting. Although all of the feedback I received was positive,
there were some things I personally wanted to change. For this video I tried to
do a better job with my presentation, and I focused on being more interactive.
Hi Gabrielle,
ReplyDeleteGood job on presenting informative details about the benefits of the product and the age range of your market. I would've liked to have seen an attention-grabbing opening to your elevator pitch, something to grab my attention, not your name. Also, you mentioned the product is budget-friendly, but you never stated the price. I think adding this information would've been essential to disclose to see if the $100,000 you are requesting makes sense.
Hi,
ReplyDeleteGreat job on your new pitch. I liked that you provided the details of the benefits of your product. I think you could improve on your introduction and make it more engaging with the audience so that it grabs their attention quickly. You didn't include a price which would be helpful to know. Overall great work!
Hi Gabrielle,
ReplyDeleteGreat job recreating your elevator pitch! You seemed comfortable and confident in front of the camera. Your focus on being more interactive definitely had an impact on this new pitch. I am a fan of your idea and have enjoyed reading your posts to see how you have further developed the idea. Adding the price of your vitamin vapes would give everyone a better idea of your products.